Elfhelm
12-06-2002, 06:41 PM
There oughta be two laws added to the books as a result of this piece:
1. A writer may use no more than one simile per paragraph.
2. A writer may use no more than two adjectives per noun.
It's a good story and I waded through it because the character description of his elder cousin is one of the finest there is, and because the season is upon us. But I found the neat little way he wrapped it up to be just a little contrived.
Ultimately, I have to say, "That's not writing; it's decorating!"
1. A writer may use no more than one simile per paragraph.
2. A writer may use no more than two adjectives per noun.
It's a good story and I waded through it because the character description of his elder cousin is one of the finest there is, and because the season is upon us. But I found the neat little way he wrapped it up to be just a little contrived.
Ultimately, I have to say, "That's not writing; it's decorating!"