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Janny
05-28-2004, 03:54 PM
True
This is not that love song
Which can overcome all wrongs
This is the truth from me to you

This is for the girl who cries
And whose tears don’t form pure lines
For the girl who ‘treads the ground’

This is the truth
This is the truth
This is the truth
This is the truth from me to you

This is for the softness in a face
For a rose’s first trace
For the soul within a smile

This is for the words I leave unsaid
Which burn in me instead
And stay alive in you

Chorus

These don’t make me think of you
But make me think of what you do
You are true, you are true,
You are, you are, you are true

Beruthiel's cat
05-28-2004, 04:38 PM
I'd like to hear the music these words are set to, Janny. (a bit hard to do when one's computer has no sound card -- long story --)

I love the stanza:

"This is for the words I leave unsaid
Which burn in me instead
And stay alive in you"

A well-rendered emotional image.

I'm a bit confused by these two lines in the chorus:

"These don’t make me think of you
But make me think of you"

I just kind of went "huh??" when I read them. But I'm old...this is a song...what do I know???


:confused:

Nice work, Janny!!

Janny
05-29-2004, 05:18 AM
Eeb ah... supposed to read:
'These don't make me think of you,
But make me think of what you do'
:o

I posted it because I couldn't work out if I liked it or not. It just seemed overtly cliched, and almost not in my style. It wasn't really saying anything either, but it was a song I'd been waiting a long while to write. the kind of thing you get in your mind and don't know how to phrase for about a year and a half and one night comes out in a form completely different to what you expect.
Thank you! :)

sun-star
05-29-2004, 11:32 AM
I think this is actually my favourite of your songs. It's nicely unspecific and very personal (read: I don't know what it's about!), so it seems extremely heartfelt. Much better with the tune though, IMO :)

P.S. "True" is the title, right? Not the first line? :confused:

Janny
05-29-2004, 01:15 PM
Yeah the title, weird Entmoot dealing of spaces...
Thanks, you just want a cut of the profits .

Any criticisms?

Tessar
05-29-2004, 11:15 PM
I like it!

I wish you'd sing it. I already have several melodies running through my head and I'd like to know if I'm even remotely correct. :p

Janny
05-30-2004, 06:05 AM
Thank you! :)
Much as I'd love to sing it, the quality of the file I have is a joke, and I can't upload 3MB onto the Moot.
Also it would make Moot gals interested in me as a dark horse third party in you little arguement with Hector! :p

Janny
07-14-2004, 03:20 PM
A little song. I just felt it was time to subject... I mean... grace the Moot with some lyrics. This sin'tnew, but I rediscovered it. I would post more lyrics, but most of them are proped up by the tune. It's a simple guitar thing embelished with harmonica, if I can be bothered. It starts quiet and cresendos for the middle section, before ending quietly. Though I am thinking of doing it all quietly, since Mme sun-star appriciated the 11 o'clock with parents in bed version.
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Heaven’s Gone

When I said goodbye I wasn’t ready to mean it
I knew that I would see you in just another week
A little time of freedom is soured when it never ends
It’s freedom for you… I’ll pretend

I miss you like hell, I miss you like hell
That’s all that’s left now heaven’s gone

And in the black you can be just beyond my reach
But a fleeting smile is all your soft face gives
And I miss stupid things like your pulse through my fingertips
There’s no heart in the world that can so sweetly beat…

And you were my light
Too good to blind but bright
Like a light I can see you still when I close my eyes
But like with a light, your fading.

Janny
07-17-2004, 05:04 PM
I'm bored. It's late but I don't want to go to bed. I'm tired of defining Communism and explaining to NAGTies that 'zionist lackey' is not exactly a term of endearment... they seemed to find it okay because they were using it in reference to George Bush. In conclusion, smart kids go to bed early and the rest of my friends are partying in Milton Keynes or are at family reunions.
Which leads us to this: another song. Very plinky littl guitar number... happy, but I'm accused of singing it sad... It is as yet unnamed.


I love the way the water turn your hair jet black
I love the way the sea shines like crystals from your back
I love the way you hate the photos of yourself
I love how you’re so meek
I wish I could take you in my arms and be mine in a summer kiss

Do you remember when we walked barefoot down the burning promenade?
Do you remember how I made you smile?
Because I remember the starlight captured in your eyes
And the sun on you face too
No-one can hold the beauty of a sunset
Like I could if I held you

I took you out to the cliff top cusp of the universe
To where the grey sea crashes to white
And as every second’s thought faded to you
I took you as mine

I remember the starlight captured in your eyes
And the sun on you face too
No-one can hold the beauty of a sunset
Like I could as I held you

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Is it possibly that music could be uploaded to here?

Janny
09-02-2004, 03:27 PM
In answer to my own question, I have hi-jacked the idea of using www.soundclick.com. I haven't got the heart to openly hijack it in the original thread, so I've tucked it away here in my ego trip thread where only the most discerning Jannyphile will read it.

Just two little numbers:

Janny's songs :) (http://www.soundclick.com/bands/2/josephparkermusic.htm)

Lady Ravyn
09-02-2004, 08:50 PM
janny those are so awesome! the lyrics and the musci really came together in those two that you recorded there; you're very talented! do you plan on doing anything with singing or music? or is it just a hobby? :)

Janny
09-03-2004, 12:18 PM
Thank-you, thanks very much. :) I'm afraid I'm in full time education at atm and I don't really have plans to enter music... I think I'll be taking the University route, but who knows.
Thanks! :)

Mercutio
09-03-2004, 01:33 PM
Woah--that's you Janny? In the "Janny's Songs"? I'm so impressed. I'll have to burn a cd of it :D

I started to try to learn guitar (decided it can't be too complicated). The only thing is I can't get the finger positions quite right (not pushing down hard enough; not close enough to the fret).

Hey did you know my brother was in London for the entire summer? (he's back here now) And my dad went over and they went to the Scottish borders.

Hey I think you'd like this cd: http://www.amazon.com/exec/obidos/tg/detail/-/B000267J10/103-0223524-0731043?v=glance

try listening to some of the samples.

Janny
09-03-2004, 01:41 PM
Nice samples. :)

Once more I have been likened to Cohen :(

Mercutio
09-03-2004, 01:43 PM
that's amazing I was just going to ask have you ever heard Leonard Cohen or Neil Young (I don't like his whiney voice though).

Janny
09-03-2004, 02:52 PM
To be honest, I was a little nonplussed by the 'seminal' 'After the Gold Rush'. Bruce Springsteen go to me first and I've never been quite so interested in 'the foundations' of his work. Springsteen rules!

Ah, my voice is a little whiney... :o at least in my recent work... and I've been using a lot of falsetto too, almost a little like Jeff Buckley, but not to that extent.
:)

BeardofPants
09-03-2004, 03:56 PM
Mercutio.:mad: Neil Young rocks, okay? (I have a lengthy biopic I wrote about him in the writer's forum somewheres...)

Janny, I can really imagine a folksy kinda sound for the Heaven's Gone one.:)

Janny
09-03-2004, 04:11 PM
BoP, I really appreciate the way you ignored my dissing of ol' Young. Just as well, I don't fancy a musical lecture. (btw, BoP, I heard someone say Queen weren't the best band ever, any comments? :p )

I'm not sure if it's folksey. But it has got that C chord, followed by a truncated C thing with B in before walking down to Am before F thing. It's a little cliched. :)

BeardofPants
09-03-2004, 04:40 PM
Actually, Janny, I didn't see your post until now. :mad:

*grabs janny's pants and yanks 'em up over his ears* And you're gonna KEEP gettin' perma-wedgies until you admit you secretly like Neil Young! (And After the Gold Rush frickin' rules, okay?:mad: ) For less... whiny... Neil, try Rust. Or Weld. :) They both rawk! *headbang*

Mercutio
09-03-2004, 08:45 PM
sorry! :D He's a good singer and all that jazz just I'm not used to his voice. Hey check out my link up there somewhere--"Hymns of the 49th parallel" cool stuff.

Janny
09-09-2004, 03:57 PM
And I like the inlay on the origin LP. Even if he's handwriting's scruffy... oh my dear BoP, are you old enough to have parents old enough to have that? :D

Anyway, this is a little song. Quiet, barely sung. Getting a little atmosphere, hopefully.

Sekt + Bier*

A hug and a whisper
I don’t know if she smiled, she just sat there like an angel next to me
All I knew was I was so alive

And circumstance and circumstance
And I’ll pretend it wasn’t me

She doesn’t like her smoke
She just drags it in and spits it out and doesn’t dwell
But she’s learnt to make it beautiful
Her bitter breath

I just sat there watching her lips move
I didn’t hear a word she said


*Yes, the names German and it means 'Sparkling Wine and Beer'. A little more poetic auf deutsch, glaube ich. :)
The '+' is simply because I don't like writing 'und'. It makes it kinda weird in my mind, and since the words 'Sekt und Bier' are only said on descretion, and if they are the 'und' is swallowed, it seemed weird to actually write it in the title.

This may be on my next EP, I haven't decided... anyway, that's due ealy January 2005, depending on financing (birthday present!).

Janny
09-10-2004, 04:12 PM
"Hymns of the 49th parallel" cool stuff.

Weird... my dad's friend came round today bringing this CD we must hear. Yup, you guessed it.

It's very nice. Nice level soothing voice. :) Makes Neil Young managable! :)

Mercutio
09-10-2004, 06:57 PM
Hahaha. wow.

Janny
09-11-2004, 05:52 AM
I've listened to it a few time now. It's really, really nice. She strikes (me...) as a cross between Eva Cassidy and Patti Scialfa (Bruce Springsteen's wife). :)

Janny
09-12-2004, 04:45 PM
Hey suckers :) I've stuck a dodgy recording of 'True' on the site.. just follow the jannyfied link. :)

sun-star
11-04-2004, 04:53 PM
Do you have any new songs, Janny? *hint, hint*

Janny
11-07-2004, 08:25 AM
Do you have any new songs, Janny? *hint, hint*
May...be...I...won...der... which...one...you...want. :p

This will be the first track on my next EP, whihc will hopefully be recorded in early Decmeber and ready for the new year. Sounds terribly swish, no? Sorry, not being sold anywhere, I'm an 'independant' artist! :p

From the Rain

I walked that way this morning
The way we all danced home last night
Dark but bathed in moonshine
And the light from your soft eyes
And you were vaulting all the puddles
Because you’d bought these brand new shoes
They were pink and wafer thin
And made to have no use

You’re just a girl in love with life and you don’t know it
There’s something deeper in your smile, one day you’ll show it
One day you’ll see you cry because you love the pain
And want a friend to hide with from the rain

You come crying back to me again
‘Tell me, what should I do?’
And I say the same thing every time
‘I would walk away from you’

But I wish that I could
I wish I meant enough to you
To leave you hurt, when you hurt me
In finding your something new

Chorus

There’s nothing but just enough light to cast a shadow,
And the whisper of the sea
And tonight a white light making silver of what’s grey
For faith was all you had to see

Chorus

Janny
11-21-2004, 05:44 PM
This is one of those quickly written songs. That is, it wasn't a long time coming, and it wasn't a long time in execution. It's born from the 'Oh I'm recording under three weeks' spurt of writing which always produces at least three songs, two of which, by law, are rubbish.
It's one of those Ryan Adams style rough-round-the-edges-musically-and-lyrically songs. It is as yet nameless, but for anyone following the 'Teen Abstinance' thread, it is willfully 'adulterous'.


The tired road rocks me
I pretend it’s your heartbeat
I wish it was you
Not regrets that rests with me

When I said goodbye
To hold you longer was all I wished
And I love you
I’m just not making any promises

And it’s always too soon until you’re gone
And it’s always too long until you’re here with me
And it’s always too soon until you gone
And it’s always too long, too long alone

The girl along the way said your picture was beautiful
That’s one more who agrees with me
And I wish you were here to say it’s not true
I wish there was more of you in me

Chorus

The tired road rocks me
And I pretend it’s your heartbeat

Chorus

sun-star
11-21-2004, 06:06 PM
The tired road rocks me
I pretend it’s your heartbeat
I wish it was you
Not regrets that rests with me

What is it with you and songs about driving down roads? :rolleyes: :D

The girl along the way said you’re picture was beautiful

Your picture. ;)

Looking forward to hearing it :)

Nerdanel
11-21-2004, 06:18 PM
:eek:

is that you singing, Janny? Really? :eek: your voice is beautiful! wow..

Janny
11-21-2004, 06:28 PM
What is it with you and songs about driving down roads? :rolleyes: :D


No 'nice image Janny'... no 'nice thought'... no 'well done, have a biscuit'? Oh well... it was originally a train... but I dunno. :o


Your picture. ;)


AHHH!!! :o :o :o
*Finds all relevant documents and amends*
*Cries in corner, ashamed at what one term without English lessons has done*

Janny
11-21-2004, 06:31 PM
:eek:

is that you singing, Janny? Really? :eek: your voice is beautiful! wow..

Yes it is. :) And thank you so much. :) :o I really appreciate it... (you can see the love and support I get from my family :rolleyes: ;) )

Pleased to please. :)

sun-star
11-21-2004, 06:31 PM
Well done, have a biscuit.

:rolleyes:

(Don't think I didn't see that 'love and support' remark :evil: )

Nerdanel
11-21-2004, 06:42 PM
You're talanted, boy. I'm glad you get all the support (biscuits) you need from your family..;)

Janny
11-24-2004, 06:08 PM
Thanks :)

But it really is hard work to find a place in my house where the tv/telephone etc etc aren't more important. It's also really hard to persuade sisters to give constructive comment. *hint* ;)

sun-star
11-25-2004, 08:38 AM
It's also really hard to persuade sisters to give constructive comment. *hint*

What, grammer nit-picking isn't constructive? :D Fine, you convinced me.

To be honest, there's not much to talk about in "the tired road rocks me". It's quite (dare I say it?) conventional. Nice lyrics but not strikingly original (I like the phrase 'a girl along the way' though - good use of syntax).

I'll come back to "From the Rain" when I get more time. Just wanted to show you I wasn't ignoring your request :p

sun-star
11-25-2004, 09:31 AM
I get the impression you want me to be 'literary', so I'll do my best :D

From the Rain

I walked that way this morning
The way we all danced home last night

I like the half-rhyme of 'walked' and 'danced' to contrast them, and the rhythm is very pleasant.

And you were vaulting all the puddles
Because you’d bought these brand new shoes
They were pink and wafer thin
And made to have no use

Nice detail - like I told you, this concretisation is your strong point.

You’re just a girl in love with life and you don’t know it
There’s something deeper in your smile, one day you’ll show it
One day you’ll see you cry because you love the pain
And want a friend to hide with from the rain

I still don't really understand this part, though I love the tune. Could you explain what's being hinted at?

You come crying back to me again
‘Tell me, what should I do?’
And I say the same thing every time
‘I would walk away from you’

Good rhyme, good use of dialogue.

But I wish that I could
I wish I meant enough to you
To leave you hurt, when you hurt me
In finding your something new

I like 'finding your something new' and the repetition of 'wish'.

There’s nothing but just enough light to cast a shadow,
And the whisper of the sea
And tonight a white light making silver of what’s grey

Very good, especially 'nothing but just enough' - a half-rhyme, echo of the previous line and poetic syntax. Lovely :)

For faith was all you had to see

I don't quite understand this either...

Janny
11-25-2004, 12:38 PM
Thank you. :) How pretentious of me to ask for lit crit. Do you think Little Miss Oxford could put it in laymans terms... :o

sun-star
11-25-2004, 01:09 PM
It's good but I don't get bits of it.

:p

Janny
11-25-2004, 03:50 PM
To be honest, there's not much to talk about in "the tired road rocks me". It's quite (dare I say it?) conventional. Nice lyrics but not strikingly original (I like the phrase 'a girl along the way' though - good use of syntax).

It didn't particularly strike me as good use of syntax... it seemed the only way to say it and make it make sense. I wouldn't mind talking more about this one though, if you can bring yourself to it. :p

You’re just a girl in love with life and you don’t know it
There’s something deeper in your smile, one day you’ll show it
One day you’ll see you cry because you love the pain
And want a friend to hide with from the rain

Basically, every so often you meet the kind of person who says and seems not to be enjoying life, but somehow you sense that they are almost satisfied and fulfilling some kind of purpose.

And maybe a white light making silver of what’s grey
Was all for faith you had to see

Erm... :o Being made aware of good things which happen, even when they don't look great...

'Concretisation', ah? *fetches dictionary*

Janny
11-30-2004, 05:10 PM
Here's to a bored sister. :) This offering is more loud than good. Inspired somewhat by events.

Heaven Sent
Heaven sent and sent for him,
And a broken heart is all the prize you’ll win
You don’t know how young you are
But you’re old enough to lose everything

Heaven sent and sent for him,
And a broken heart is all the prize you’ll win
Until you touched me I didn’t know you had a form
But he knows and he’s known too long

Heaven sent and sent for him,
And a broken heart is all the prize you’ll win
He sent you a burning red rose bouquet
It should have been white lilies; he’d show he knew what he was doing that way…

sun-star
11-30-2004, 05:11 PM
ooh, I like that. Especially the last line. Is it finished?

Janny
11-30-2004, 05:17 PM
Yes... there a lot of repetition and guitar playing. I have a nice kind riff in there. Oh! 11th December! So soon! :)

I think actually the last line may have been a bit over egged. :)

sun-star
11-30-2004, 05:21 PM
It's a bit long, but good.

Also Until you touched me I didn’t know you had a form

Form as in shape, or racing form? :D

Janny
11-30-2004, 05:29 PM
*Doh*

Yes... the last lines of each verse kind of spill over into the guitar interlude. Find symbolism in that, Lady English. :p

sun-star
11-30-2004, 05:34 PM
*Doh*

Yes... the last lines of each verse kind of spill over into the guitar interlude. Find symbolism in that, Lady English. :p

*clears throat* the - uh - use of enjambement - uh - expresses - or would it not be better to say, represents - the - uh - incomplete and irresolvable feelings of the speaker - or, as it may be, persona - yes. *clears throat*

/Oxford academic voice

Janny
11-30-2004, 05:47 PM
Well done. Funny how it's true, but is actually completely invalidated by the fact it wasn't intentional. :)

sun-star
11-30-2004, 05:50 PM
Well done. Funny how it's true, but is actually completely invalidated by the fact it wasn't intentional. :)

Never! The author's intention has nothing to do with it! The Author is dead! Long live the critic!

Janny
01-30-2005, 04:34 PM
And the harvest is... erm... :o

Sarah Jane

Blonde hair and a stripy scarf
Blue jeans and a smile
Such a pretty name - Sarah Jane
And don’t you know how to be beautiful

Wide eyed to your trouble
Wide eyed to the truth
You look back and sing ‘it brought me closer to Him’
And don’t you know that’s for the good

And you’ll die
Fighting in the corner of your noble cause
I can see it now, Sarah Jane

And why don’t you fly?
What binds you to the earth?
You try so hard, your place is in the stars
And haven’t you earned it, Sarah Jane

And you’ll die
Fighting in the corner of your noble cause
I can see it now, Sarah Jane

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New album's 'out' btw. ;)

sun-star
01-31-2005, 07:23 AM
I'm imagining a very Dylanesque tune to this one... I like the religious theme. Are you deliberately trying not to write love songs?

Sarah Jane = real person? ('cos you do know that's your cousin's middle name too, right?)

Blue jeans and a smile

Reminds me of Ryan Adams' Sylvia Plath... busted tooth and a smile :)

Janny
01-31-2005, 04:39 PM
You are my sister! :O

Yes, very Dylanesque. It is intentionally religious and there are a few other things in there - spot the corruption of a Latin motto. ;) I forgot Sarah was Sarah Jane... :o but yes, it is a real NAGTY. I didn't want to know her too much before I wrote it. We had one of those 'get to know you' IM chats, but I didn't really want the idea clouded by a real person, so it's one a framework of facts.

It has actually fulfilled my desire to write something honouring soldiers. I had found that difficult because everything seemed either pretentious or explpoitative.

sun-star
02-01-2005, 01:19 PM
Per ardua ad astra...

Janny
02-01-2005, 04:44 PM
Woo hoo hoo! :D You are sharp Miss Letters. :)

sun-star
02-01-2005, 04:52 PM
That I am.

Though I also thought of Oscar Wilde - "we are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars".

Janny
02-08-2005, 06:16 PM
No, no. That would be a literary thing... :rolleyes:

My tick list of song subjects is almost getting ticked off. Crikey. I'm inarticulate incarnate.

Have I've given you the start of 'Satisfied Heart'?

Somewhat unwritten. Tis about Alfie. Get that reference if you will. ;)

Out across the midnight floor
Like a light stolen from the stars
There's something in your whisper and your smile
But something else steals my satisfied heart

And I use a word like perfection for you
And I know it can't be true
But now walking on the frosty earth
I think it fits best for you

(Bridge.. somewhat cathartic - cruching Broken Angel-esq chords)
And ohhh, you melt the snow
Set the fire burning in the stars from bitter cold
But ohhh, don't you know?
Tomorrow I'll still have my pretty darling

Out from the back of my mind
You walk like guilt before my eyes...
And here it goes... I'd like the last to emulate the first in form.

sun-star
02-09-2005, 05:10 AM
I don't have a clue what it means, but I know who Alfie is :p

Janny
03-02-2005, 06:26 PM
Were we discussing this? (Not that I'm vaguely using this as a wordpad :p )

And I can hold you as the hurricane rolls in
But you still think that summer breeze is cutting
And I can hold you as the deluge falls
But you don't think of me at all

I hope I broke you heart
You could have broken mine

Rosie Gamgee
03-02-2005, 06:43 PM
Janny, wow. I haven't read in here until now. These lyrics are great! I'll have to get a pair of headphones from somewhere and listen. If the music's as good as the words you must record! :D

p.s. Can I use a stanza in my sig??? Pweeeeeze? :really cute smiley:

Janny
03-02-2005, 06:53 PM
Thanks :) My voice leaves somewhat to be desired, but I'v kinda learnt how to play the guitar now :P

Rosie Gamgee
03-02-2005, 07:00 PM
I really want to play the guitar, and I've tried... I got a bit uninspired, you might say. And my computer won't play your soundclips. :mad:

Janny
03-02-2005, 07:05 PM
Keep clicking the link... it'll do wonders for my stats. :P :)

I wouldn't give up learning the guitar; once learnt as an instrument it gives you so much more freedom to what you want than something like a violin. [/painful experience]

Rosie Gamgee
03-02-2005, 07:14 PM
My sister plays a violin- and I don't think I will every consider playing one-*squeak-scratch-squeak-scrape squeeeeeeeaaak, etc.*= [/painful experience] ;)

Janny
03-08-2005, 10:56 AM
Ok people... we have another for you...
Very slow, with pretty big gaps in the middle of the lines. Crescendos on the chorus second line and the last line of the bridge. :)

Solitary Rose

You're not the only rose that ever grew
And I'm not the only one to look upon you

And I'd write poetry for you
But you seem more like prose
Naturally is how you grew, my Solitary Rose

And maybe there's too much silence in what I say to you
But if I've bever said I love you it's because I never needed to

Chorus

Eine kleine Brücke:
You can come around my house
Sanctuary for a while
And you'll be forever late and I'll smile

The winter sun shines across your face into my eyes
You watch me turn away and you just smile and shut the blinds

sun-star
03-09-2005, 06:38 AM
Is that two songs or one long one :confused:

Rosie Gamgee
03-09-2005, 10:28 AM
Looks like just one song. I like it. Something about your songs, Janny, makes me think of Neil Diamond.

Janny
03-11-2005, 06:22 AM
Thanks. :) They've been pinned down to being most like Nick Drake, but people have mentioned Neil Diamond... perhaps I should listen to him sometime.

Yes it is one song. :) I promise not to lable in German again. ;)

sun-star
03-11-2005, 02:14 PM
And I promise not to be stupid again. Honest ;)

The second part after the bridge just didn't seem to have anything to do with roses. Not your best lyrics ever... hope the tune is good :)

Rosie Gamgee
03-16-2005, 10:20 AM
Thanks. :) They've been pinned down to being most like Nick Drake, but people have mentioned Neil Diamond... perhaps I should listen to him sometime.
:eek: :eek: :eek: You've never heard Neil Diamond?! :eek:
A youth pastor I knew always used to say "There are two kinds of people in the world: those that like Neil Diamond and those that don't."

Of course I always say there really are only three kinds of people in the world: those that can count, and those that can't.

Janny
03-16-2005, 04:10 PM
I thikn there are 10 types of people. Those you get binary and those you don't. :)

sun-star
05-07-2005, 07:23 AM
*cough cough*

Anything new?

Janny
05-08-2005, 02:58 PM
Anything new?

What's the most recent you've heard? I think there's some new stuff on the website. Also lyrics on DA.

sun-star
05-09-2005, 05:53 AM
Can you post a link to your DA page? Don't forget, I can't listen to recordings, only read lyrics *smiles sweetly*

Janny
05-09-2005, 11:27 AM
Headphones into the tower?

Anyway: http://blue-guitar.deviantart.com

sun-star
05-09-2005, 01:13 PM
Huh? Anyway, thanks. I'll read and digest when I have time, but some initial comments:

- 'Solitary Rose' isn't a weak love song! It's great!
- nice May morning picture...
- you could say that 'something new' isn't a mistake because it's a noun phrase... just a suggestion
- and dare I hint there may be a typo in this line of 'Satisfied Heart'?

Oh, you melt the snow, set the fire burning in the stats from bitter cold

Stats or stars? :)

Janny
05-09-2005, 02:41 PM
What? What are you talking about? I'm talking of my love for a passionate statistician...

sun-star
05-09-2005, 03:12 PM
Really?

Janny
05-11-2005, 04:23 PM
Really.

Tonight - Think of the front cover to Darkness in her Eyes ;) (And it's a working title)

You’ll escape the lens tonight,
But you left your image on the world
The evening star is under cloud tonight
But it still shines here on the earth

You walk along the shore now
I bet you don’t even feel the cold
The beach, the sea, the pier are grey now
But you leave trails of gold

I move to you, you step away
You know where you belong tonight
I wish I could for a moment capture you
But you belong way beyond my eyes

You walk out there
Like you belong to the earth
But something in you’s way beyond that sea-sky wall
Inside the safety of the night

You’ll escape the lens tonight
But you left your image on the world
You won’t escape my mind tonight
I wouldn’t let you
Not for the earth

sun-star
05-16-2005, 04:51 PM
You can come up with a better title than 'Tonight'... How about 'Escape the Lens'?

Hmm, that sounds like a political slogan ("beat the man!", "rock the vote!", "escape the lens") :D

Janny
05-19-2005, 03:36 PM
Yes dear...

This is 'Nightblind'. It didn't make the cut of the last album, but I played it today and it really evoked a strong memory. As I think of it, 'played' is like 'stayed': a 'yed' ending, unlike 'laid' from 'lay' and 'said' from 'say'. I always mispelt 'payed' for 'paid' is all. Is it having two letters before the 'ay', you think?
Oh yes, the song...

In your arms, I feel your heart beat, I hear you breath
I rest on you, I fall into everything I need
Nightblind

You rock me to sleep and you don't know you do it
You are as you are, you lie in perfect peace
Nightblind

Nightblind. Nightblind.

Entranced, my mind rests on you face
Your eyes light up and you just smile back grace
Nightblind

You've no more beauty than beautiful, but you are peace
And all the softness in your heart rest so much deeper than skin deep

Nightblind. Nightblind.

I rest on you, I fall into everything I need
Nightblind

sun-star
05-19-2005, 03:42 PM
That's nice. Didn't you use the line "I feel your heart beat" in another song?

Janny
05-19-2005, 03:45 PM
Only all of them, but I suspect 'Tired Road'.

sun-star
05-19-2005, 03:49 PM
That's the one. What does 'nightblind' mean, anyway?

Janny
05-20-2005, 02:35 PM
The artist is dead and all that...

sun-star
05-21-2005, 03:40 AM
:p I know, but you can tell me what the word means...

Janny
05-23-2005, 03:04 PM
Get there yourself was my point. :P

The lateness of the hour obscuring one's perception of a situation.

sun-star
05-23-2005, 03:07 PM
See, that wasn't so hard. You didn't have to quote Roland Barthes at me first :p

durinsbane2244
06-17-2005, 08:15 PM
is this a place for ANYONE to put up lyrics?

Janny
06-18-2005, 12:03 PM
It was an ego thread, but go ahead. :)

Curubethion
09-04-2005, 08:56 PM
Skiing down the slippery slope
Of shattered hopes.
Living in the fast lane,
Life won't be the same.
She went up top,
Couldn't ever stop
The hi's, then lies and goodbyes
Down the road...

[Chorus]:
WHY DID IT START?
HOW DID IT START?
WHEN WILL IT STOP?
A catapult that goes on and on.
She sees You,
She needs You-
Why won't she call?

A leads to B to C to D again;
Someday it's gonna stop,
But who knows when?
She sees her mistake,
But she's gonna fall.
She's going to the edge-
How far to lose it all?

[Chorus]

Bridge:
Sometimes we don't know how to stop.
Speeding reckless, can't see light above.
We've got to reach out, hold it...

[Chorus]