A sonnet about Faramir/Eowyn

[ethuiliel]

I had to write a sonnet for school, and came up with this.

We were both nearly dead,
When by the king we were healed.
We had both fallen on the Pellennor Field...s
A week, the king had said
I should stay in my bed
I had been hurt as the sword I did wield.
And my arm was broken behind my shield.
So I was left behind while to battle they sped.
Alone, until I met the Steward of Gondor.
We looked East, where the battle was being fought.
Then, when it was won, we kissed in sight of all.
The evil to the East was no more.
He and I had found the healing we sought.
And our love for eachother was not small.

[crickhollow]

the content is not bad, but remember that the sonnet form is pretty strict:
14 lines, and ten syllables per line (Iambic Pentameter). Also, the ends need to rhyme first line with the third, second line with the fourth, fifth line with the seventh, six with the eighth, ninth with the eleventh, tenth with the twelfth, and the 13th and 14th with each other. in other words:
a
b
a
b
c
d
c
d
e
f
e
f
g
g

technically, if it doesn't follow that format, it isn't a sonnet.

[Count Comfect]

Actually, the iambic part is right, but there are two ways to write a sonnet - Shakespearean (which crickhollow described) and Petrarchan (what ethuliel did - ABBAABBACDECDE).
But a nice poem no matter what.

[ethuiliel]

I just followed the rules my teacher gave...which was just the rhyme scheme of ABBAABBACDECDE. The Petrarchan style.
That's what we were studying.

[crickhollow]

Originally posted by ethuiliel
I just followed the rules my teacher gave...which was just the rhyme scheme of ABBAABBACDECDE. The Petrarchan style.
That's what we were studying. oops! my mistake! I know it isn't the only form, but I'm so much more familiar with the Elizabethan, that my brain automatically slips into it. :o

But that makes so much more sense.

Carry on, then! ;)